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Tuesday 5th April 2011  WHY PEOPLE SHOULD VISIT THE B.O.P

WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.

Success Criteria My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

Do you feel bored and want a holiday but not sure were to go to?well I have chosen the best place that you must go and it is the beautiful Bay Of Plenty In New Zealand,It is nice a combination of Tauranga and Rotorua.

In the Bay Of Plenty there are alot of popular tourist attractions that are cheap that you must go to like there is the Movies.Fun and exciting and full of laughs,Great for Kids and Adults. The Beach,The Beach is a major Tourist attraction in the bay of Plenty.Clean fun,fresh and relaxing,It’s free but make sure you put some sunblock on.There are always places like the luge and the redwoods in Rotorua,these beautiful places are filled with kiwi fun and breath taking true rememberable memories.There is maclaren’s falls and ALOT MORE.

There are also amazing accommodation just waiting for you and there is also so astonishing spas and swimming pools that are paradice so you MUST stay with the accommodation you deserve. Some places don’t even have a bathroom or a spa/pools so The if you want the best place to stay with care come to the B.O.P.

Last but not least there is huge cheap prices on nice clothing that are just fantastic for you and we’ve got everything kids will love from ages 1-14 like amazing books and toys and alot of clothing that need to have in your hands so you will look as the best you have been in your life and you will look very nice. There are also alot of board games like chess,connect 4 and many many more. When you go you can also get the most delicious food that you only get In the Bay Of Plenty, we have got the most juiciest 100% kiwi chicken In the world and that is the best tasting chicken you will ever find and many more delicious food.

So choose the Bay Of Plenty now and I will assure you that you will have an awesome holiday and you will definitely want to live here fore ever because it is the BEST place in the world.

You are making excellent progress with your writing Hamish, well done. You use strong imperatives to really convince me and great use of personal pronouns also. Well done on using paragraphs in your writing but remember every new idea is a new paragraph - your last paragraph has many ideas in it. You need to remember to state your 3 main ideas in your introduction and then restate them in your conclusion. This was part of your success criteria. Overall a good effort, Hamish. Well done. Miss Crone :)